First off I have to say that this was a very strong opening. I'm not sure what made it different but this opening was more compelling to me then many of your openings. It allowed me to stay in the story better.
I'm not sure if it is your descriptive words and writing or my own experiences projecting but I could very clearly visualize the entire scene with the cigarette punishment.
This is a very interesting case study on breaking addiction though... good job on your ability to choose for yourself rather then live in the habit. :)
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Date: 2010-03-17 12:04 am (UTC)I'm not sure if it is your descriptive words and writing or my own experiences projecting but I could very clearly visualize the entire scene with the cigarette punishment.
This is a very interesting case study on breaking addiction though... good job on your ability to choose for yourself rather then live in the habit. :)